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Nurturing
Earth,
Demolishing
Society
For #FourLinePoems contest here. [link]
I had NO clue what to title it. Any suggestions?
I hope I'm not to late
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Critique by lolipopsi Mar 30, 2013, 10:13:15 PM
This is amazing! You can really say a lot in just for words! And I love your choice of words! It's just stunning! <3
One thing I would recommend for next time is adding a title. That would support the overall impact of this great poem. Other than that, however, this is amazing! I don't know if you like to write poems, but it would definitely be great if you could make more! <3
This truly has a lot of meaning. It is very great. <333
This poem deserves a lot of attention! Keep up the good work!
Sincerely, Lolipopsi <3
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JenniInoue Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
This reminds me of the poem called "The World Is Too Much With Us", by William Wordsworth.
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CHLI Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're right, they are similar.
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love this...it made me think of the quote: Mankind's Greatest Enemy (Is Himself) ...maybe a title??? Congrats!! :heart:
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Kaz-D Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hello!
The contest results have been announced! :)
[link]
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CHLI Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Than you so much! :heart: I entered for the sake of entering, I didn't think I would win.
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